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Bill Ding cartoon

This one is too busy. "Weather's worst BANG"? The insertion "Resists and lasts"? I'm sure you're expecting a comment about how the "BANG" blast and cloud is situated at Bill's groin, and that surely this must mean something sexual. I'll abstain this time, or until the rejected slogan anyway. I will say that comma isn't necessary, it's one sentence that normally flows without pause (other than the poetic pause from being at the end of a line). Why is Bill's shadow square? He may be standing next to a house's external wall, demonstrating that the siding is impervious to weather, but that isn't a door behind him.
 
Rejected ad slogan:
Climb upon my hardwood
Raise the hinge to not hang
Ride the pine and in time
It goes off with a bang
[PERSISTS AND LASTS]

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